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Incorruptible... A poem by Bea :)

 
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Incorruptible... A poem by Bea :)
Incorruptible by Bea

Throw 'em down or double down, it's all the same to me
I'll own a slight advantage, this ain't my reality
I'm not the game you asked for, not the rules you knew
There's a hidden hand at work to make a game of me and you.

Yeah, you sold me down the river flush with bitter misery
Isolation, love, becomes me in more ways than you can see
But I'll raise you double nothing and never blink an eye
The stakes seem too important to allow us room to lie.

I saw the game before you.
You could say I see straight through you.

So now I'm the one just sitting here waiting
I hear you talking in circles with nothing to say
But the rush of the flush has got me thinking
This is the hand I was meant to play
And there's never been nothing that you wanted so much
You say you'd tear it all down for just a single touch

I'm the one, I'm the one, but I'm not the one for you.

They say when dancing with the devil, the devil changes you
As you can see I'm not affected so that story can't be true
Or did you tell it backward to hide the lies you've told
Thinking I would never discover the lies you've sold?

You shake your head and tell me that I've got the story wrong
But look into my eyes and see what I've known for so long
There's an angel and a devil used to push us to and fro
But in games with odds like this, I'll choose the devil that I know.

I wrote the script we're playing
You should see what they're all saying.

So now I'm the one here sitting here waiting
Got the hand of all lifetimes and I'm calling your bluff
I see you wet from the sweat, lip all a'trembling
Are my games a bit too rough?
And there's never been nothing you'd compare to this
You say you'd tear it all down for just a single kiss.

I'm the one, I'm the one, but I'm not the one for you.

You're all in now
You're wondering how
Killing sacred cows
My secret, special tao

When you sat down to the table, you were conceited, convinced
And you thought you could play me, but there's something you missed
I own a soul that's suffered and let it all go
You came here playing God and left a devil that I know.
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Great work Bea.


A bit of interest to note, I saw this on the bathroom wall my first day of selling this week:

"It's hard to dance with the Devil on your back"

Your poem reminded me of it.



Reminded me a bit of this as well...



Never let em see you sweat.



hf
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Well constructed, compelling and interesting. I like the timing.

And....Ouch.
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To Bea or not to Bea, that is the question.
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Bea the Alligator, lol.
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hf
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Well constructed, compelling and interesting. I like the timing.

And....Ouch.
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Thanks :)
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Cheers, keep throwing it out there.
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Ok, will do, Dion... this one sounds romantic and girly, but it's more about the war of the sexes due to lack of understanding... Think Mother and Father... I named it Ariel's Lament due to the first line mirroring the Hans Christian Anderson sad version of the Little Mermaid.

Ariel's Lament

So hard to walk out in this world, each step is pain
But there's a thing about the dance that makes us dance again
I'd give the world to show you, but I can't feel you anymore
Didn't think the world would fail you and take me for the whore.
The wide and daunting road ahead feels false and I'm afraid
I don't have the voice to beg you and no time left for masqurade
You always said I lacked the foresight to know what I had done
And you always had the insight to see just what we'd become
But you never felt the freedom of the wind upon your skin
You watched and never walked it, always thought it was a sin
If I thought you'd learned the lesson of a love that's given free
I would drag down all the heavens just to bring you back to me.
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"It's hard to dance with the Devil on your back"

 Quoting: Seer777


That reminds me of a reply to a "Merry Christmas" greeting this past year:

"It's hard to have a Merry Christmas when my government is trying to kill me."
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Well done, Bea! :)
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Ok, will do, Dion... this one sounds romantic and girly, but it's more about the war of the sexes due to lack of understanding... Think Mother and Father... I named it Ariel's Lament due to the first line mirroring the Hans Christian Anderson sad version of the Little Mermaid.

Ariel's Lament

So hard to walk out in this world, each step is pain
But there's a thing about the dance that makes us dance again
I'd give the world to show you, but I can't feel you anymore
Didn't think the world would fail you and take me for the whore.
The wide and daunting road ahead feels false and I'm afraid
I don't have the voice to beg you and no time left for masqurade
You always said I lacked the foresight to know what I had done
And you always had the insight to see just what we'd become
But you never felt the freedom of the wind upon your skin
You watched and never walked it, always thought it was a sin
If I thought you'd learned the lesson of a love that's given free
I would drag down all the heavens just to bring you back to me.
 Quoting: Joule Thief


People often don't cherish what they have because they compare it to the illusion of happiness and clean, dissected pornographic images.

Sometimes happiness is being in the emotional state you are in and learning it's lessons.
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Incorruptible by Bea

Throw 'em down or double down, it's all the same to me
I'll own a slight advantage, this ain't my reality
I'm not the game you asked for, not the rules you knew
There's a hidden hand at work to make a game of me and you.

Yeah, you sold me down the river flush with bitter misery
Isolation, love, becomes me in more ways than you can see
But I'll raise you double nothing and never blink an eye
The stakes seem too important to allow us room to lie.

I saw the game before you.
You could say I see straight through you.

So now I'm the one just sitting here waiting
I hear you talking in circles with nothing to say
But the rush of the flush has got me thinking
This is the hand I was meant to play
And there's never been nothing that you wanted so much
You say you'd tear it all down for just a single touch

I'm the one, I'm the one, but I'm not the one for you.

They say when dancing with the devil, the devil changes you
As you can see I'm not affected so that story can't be true
Or did you tell it backward to hide the lies you've told
Thinking I would never discover the lies you've sold?

You shake your head and tell me that I've got the story wrong
But look into my eyes and see what I've known for so long
There's an angel and a devil used to push us to and fro
But in games with odds like this, I'll choose the devil that I know.

I wrote the script we're playing
You should see what they're all saying.

So now I'm the one here sitting here waiting
Got the hand of all lifetimes and I'm calling your bluff
I see you wet from the sweat, lip all a'trembling
Are my games a bit too rough?
And there's never been nothing you'd compare to this
You say you'd tear it all down for just a single kiss.

I'm the one, I'm the one, but I'm not the one for you.

You're all in now
You're wondering how
Killing sacred cows
My secret, special tao

When you sat down to the table, you were conceited, convinced
And you thought you could play me, but there's something you missed
I own a soul that's suffered and let it all go
You came here playing God and left a devil that I know.
 Quoting: Joule Thief




That poem reminds me of this video.
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thats cool bea,perhaps devils need sympathy sometimes,lol....please to meet you ,hope you guess my name,lol
How unfortunate for some rulers when men,women,and children continue to think... Keep repeating the lies loud enough and long enough and just maybe the people will start to believe the lies again and good luck with that...finding your energy open until mars becomes raging aries...
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Incorruptible by Bea

Throw 'em down or double down, it's all the same to me
I'll own a slight advantage, this ain't my reality
I'm not the game you asked for, not the rules you knew
There's a hidden hand at work to make a game of me and you.

Yeah, you sold me down the river flush with bitter misery
Isolation, love, becomes me in more ways than you can see
But I'll raise you double nothing and never blink an eye
The stakes seem too important to allow us room to lie.

I saw the game before you.
You could say I see straight through you.

So now I'm the one just sitting here waiting
I hear you talking in circles with nothing to say
But the rush of the flush has got me thinking
This is the hand I was meant to play
And there's never been nothing that you wanted so much
You say you'd tear it all down for just a single touch

I'm the one, I'm the one, but I'm not the one for you.

They say when dancing with the devil, the devil changes you
As you can see I'm not affected so that story can't be true
Or did you tell it backward to hide the lies you've told
Thinking I would never discover the lies you've sold?

You shake your head and tell me that I've got the story wrong
But look into my eyes and see what I've known for so long
There's an angel and a devil used to push us to and fro
But in games with odds like this, I'll choose the devil that I know.

I wrote the script we're playing
You should see what they're all saying.

So now I'm the one here sitting here waiting
Got the hand of all lifetimes and I'm calling your bluff
I see you wet from the sweat, lip all a'trembling
Are my games a bit too rough?
And there's never been nothing you'd compare to this
You say you'd tear it all down for just a single kiss.

I'm the one, I'm the one, but I'm not the one for you.

You're all in now
You're wondering how
Killing sacred cows
My secret, special tao

When you sat down to the table, you were conceited, convinced
And you thought you could play me, but there's something you missed
I own a soul that's suffered and let it all go
You came here playing God and left a devil that I know.
 Quoting: Joule Thief




That poem reminds me of this video.
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 12066007


Thank you my James Bond Muse :)
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You’re welcome hiding
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Someone left me karma my poem was too long, lmao. Uh... really? I didn't know there was a standard length for poetry, lol. Wonder if anyone ever told the greats that... not that I'm a great one, but still... Kind of humorous, lol.
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That poem was powerful...of course the timing was perfect...you always know when Bea...

hf
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Re: Incorruptible... A poem by Bea :)
Ok, will do, Dion... this one sounds romantic and girly, but it's more about the war of the sexes due to lack of understanding... Think Mother and Father... I named it Ariel's Lament due to the first line mirroring the Hans Christian Anderson sad version of the Little Mermaid.

Ariel's Lament

So hard to walk out in this world, each step is pain
But there's a thing about the dance that makes us dance again
I'd give the world to show you, but I can't feel you anymore
Didn't think the world would fail you and take me for the whore.
The wide and daunting road ahead feels false and I'm afraid
I don't have the voice to beg you and no time left for masqurade
You always said I lacked the foresight to know what I had done
And you always had the insight to see just what we'd become
But you never felt the freedom of the wind upon your skin
You watched and never walked it, always thought it was a sin
If I thought you'd learned the lesson of a love that's given free
I would drag down all the heavens just to bring you back to me.
 Quoting: Joule Thief


nice poetry very emotional
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If you accept the devil’s invitation to dance, don’t complain if he steps upon your toes with a cloven hoof. He’ll only laugh. devil6

I liked your poem; the structure held your narrative together well. I’m afraid I get bogged down when I try writing poems much longer than a haiku. Perhaps we should start a poetry thread?

Green love from Jim, the Taoist Hermit
And it shall come to pass in the last days, saith God, I will pour out of my Spirit upon all flesh: and your sons and your daughters shall prophesy, and your young men shall see visions, and your old men shall dream dreams - Acts 2:17 (KJV)
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I loved it, but I love poetry and I'm passionate about people doing things that bring them joy.

If writing a poem is something you enjoy you should continue.
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Wonderful and emotional. I could feel you in that poem. hf
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Incorrigible
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Thread: The Role of the Trickster hf
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bump
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Madames, i only questioned your very emotional nature, never your actual skills and talents.

And it does a great disservice to yourself when you are removing my comments.

Anyway, please give me an address to write a reply for your postcards.
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When you are being "natural", your passions and ahem inclinations immediately shine through your narrative.
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such are the facts when the "personal is the political"
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it's a good poem. a little dark.
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late reply


I have flaws, I was just as surprised as you when I found out!

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sorry


i thought i was talking to loki

my mistake !
I have flaws, I was just as surprised as you when I found out!

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fuckoff one eye !
this ain't the land of blind people !
I have flaws, I was just as surprised as you when I found out!

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