New beat that I just uploaded to YouTube....check it out if you have some extra time!!

I'm gonna slay it just for you. Give me an hour

Nice.

Now do a version where you bring your bassline forward a bit, add some hall reverb to your piano, and just shorten the longplay of the loops to about half the original length.

What type of equipment/software are you using?

Good work. Keep it up.

The snare sounds like a fart in a rain hat ...Stick with it ... you will get there in the end !

Listen to and use a track like this as a template ... Emulate it to see how the satructure of a track works.

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Good luck

I write songs myself so here is some criticism.

2 minutes in and it's still the same loop... change it up, I'm bored.

The snare is way too loud. Turn it down a few db so it sits better in the mix.

The piano sounds so flat and like it was played on a 50 dollar keyboard. Bring up the 5k-6k hz frequencies too add more dynamics and brightness and like the poster above said some reverb.

4 minutes in... song ending... still the same loop... wow really? 4 minutes of the same loop and then it just ends abruptly.

I wonder if you did any EQing or mastering at all with this song. To me it sounds like you just glued some preset beats together and called it your song.

You need to be more creative. Sorry I had no positive things to say but you seem to still be learning. I'd recommend just drenching yourself in whatever information you can find about songwriting, structure, mixing, mastering, etc. In a few years you should have a good basis.

I didn't use any preset beats. I agree that it is repetitive, but I still like it. It's definitely my beat, I didn't copy anything.

I use a basic MIDI keyboard/controller, Sonar X3 Producer Edition, a bunch of virtual instruments, and my computer.

You should check out some Journey.

Sounds very close

Needs more cowbell