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My first attempt at poetry since college...(20 years+)

Be kind, but honest, and feel free to share yours:

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Summation

Paint not a wider world upon which we must toil and parley,
for history's hale handmaiden will render of both victories and varnishes an equally shallow luster and depth.

Contentment, surely, was never the vice of any man,
but rather the aspiration and refuge, alone, of the wise and the just.

Not that we've oft attained that hallowed height, though desperately we'd have done--
for the allurements of the earth (and the father of it) have been too strong for us.

But, we pray that at rare times we be remembered for having desired it,
and in the desiring, perhaps that we did sometimes discover a morsel of truth...
or were caressed by the wingtips of angels.
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12/02/2016 02:34 PM
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A lyrical, elegiac piece. I liked it...especially that last line.
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12/02/2016 02:38 PM
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Thanks. Not too stale and stuffy?
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12/02/2016 02:41 PM
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The language is more early 19th century than I personally prefer, but no, it's good. I'm a Christian so I can relate to the sentiments. I'm sure some won't like the subject matter, but the language is antique, and I also love antiques.
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12/02/2016 02:46 PM
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Have a bump.
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12/02/2016 02:50 PM
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That was beautiful, O.P. I like poetic language to be a bit more high flung than average speech.

I was touched by it.

Keep at it!

5 stars.
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That was beautiful, O.P. I like poetic language to be a bit more high flung than average speech.

I was touched by it.

Keep at it!

5 stars.
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Thanks. I have some historical essays that have been published in an established journal and several novels up on Amazon, but I haven't touched poetry for a long time.

True story...

I am a Christian as the American poster realized, and when I took poetry in college I could not get a decent grade until I realized even poetry had become so politically correct (even already in the mid-90s) that I had to leave my religion out of it and sound like a new ager. So, I wrote a poem all about blending with nature and praising human intellect, and yaddy yada. Got an A+ on that one, and haven't written another poem since.
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That was beautiful, O.P. I like poetic language to be a bit more high flung than average speech.

I was touched by it.

Keep at it!

5 stars.
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 64201837


Thanks. I have some historical essays that have been published in an established journal and several novels up on Amazon, but I haven't touched poetry for a long time.

True story...

I am a Christian as the American poster realized, and when I took poetry in college I could not get a decent grade until I realized even poetry had become so politically correct (even already in the mid-90s) that I had to leave my religion out of it and sound like a new ager. So, I wrote a poem all about blending with nature and praising human intellect, and yaddy yada. Got an A+ on that one, and haven't written another poem since.
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 70790916


Sounds about right. Academia is SOOOO biased while they try to pass themselves off as being sooo "open minded." What a hoot.
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12/02/2016 03:00 PM
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Not a poet myself, but I wouldn't mind seeing what glp's got.
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12/02/2016 03:02 PM
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TheGasMan II
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In days of old
When knights were bold
And rubbers weren't invented
They took a leaf
And wrapped their beef
And babies were prevented.

chuckle
"Every new child born brings the message that God is not yet discouraged of man." - Tagore
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If you must resort to violence, then you've already lost.



John Conner - Rising Sun
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Someday, after mastering the winds, the waves, the tides and gravity, we shall harness for God the energies of love, and then, for a second time in the history of the world, man will have discovered fire.

Pierre Teilhard de Chardin
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Psst....I love charcoal.
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FYI, I'm not Canadian.

I am a born, raised and current die hard Texan!

tgmtxcon
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Maybe Trump will help us clean up some of the extreme leftyness of the colleges and universities.
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12/02/2016 03:06 PM
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In days of old
When knights were bold
And rubbers weren't invented
They took a leaf
And wrapped their beef
And babies were prevented.

chuckle
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LOL. I Googled it, and you cheated.
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That was beautiful, O.P. I like poetic language to be a bit more high flung than average speech.

I was touched by it.

Keep at it!

5 stars.
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 64201837


...and several novels up on Amazon...


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Got a link, O.P.?
TheGasMan II
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In days of old
When knights were bold
And rubbers weren't invented
They took a leaf
And wrapped their beef
And babies were prevented.

chuckle
 Quoting: TheGasMan II


LOL. I Googled it, and you cheated.
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 72759550


Doh...busted.

Courtesy of the toilet stall wall.

chuckle
"Every new child born brings the message that God is not yet discouraged of man." - Tagore
-----------------------------
If you must resort to violence, then you've already lost.



John Conner - Rising Sun
-----------------------------
Someday, after mastering the winds, the waves, the tides and gravity, we shall harness for God the energies of love, and then, for a second time in the history of the world, man will have discovered fire.

Pierre Teilhard de Chardin
-----------------------------
Psst....I love charcoal.
.
.
.
FYI, I'm not Canadian.

I am a born, raised and current die hard Texan!

tgmtxcon
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12/02/2016 03:12 PM
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In days of old
When knights were bold
And rubbers weren't invented
They took a leaf
And wrapped their beef
And babies were prevented.

chuckle
 Quoting: TheGasMan II


LOL. I Googled it, and you cheated.
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 72759550


Doh...busted.

Courtesy of the toilet stall wall.

chuckle
 Quoting: TheGasMan II


LOL...been some damned fine poetry left there over the decades!
the redeemable furry pete

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12/02/2016 03:19 PM
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Don't laugh at Death
for you can't be sure
he has a sense of humor
what others say who've
not been there
could be just a rumor


I wrote that in high school

Last Edited by Furrry Pete on 12/02/2016 03:19 PM
Jesus loves me, this I know, for the bible tells me so

Calm seas do not a sailor make,
Nor easy horses, a horseman.

Nor easy believing, a Christian

Proudly deplorable since forever
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12/02/2016 03:22 PM
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Don't laugh at Death
for you can't be sure
he has a sense of humor
what others say who've
not been there
could be just a rumor


Witty! I like!

I wrote that in high school
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12/02/2016 03:24 PM
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I'll bump this along.
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12/02/2016 03:27 PM
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That was beautiful, O.P. I like poetic language to be a bit more high flung than average speech.

I was touched by it.

Keep at it!

5 stars.
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 64201837


...and several novels up on Amazon...


 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 70790916


Got a link, O.P.?
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[link to www.amazon.com (secure)]
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Don't laugh at Death
for you can't be sure
he has a sense of humor
what others say who've
not been there
could be just a rumor


I wrote that in high school
 Quoting: the redeemable furry pete


Not bad. Done anything since H.S.?
the redeemable furry pete

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Don't laugh at Death
for you can't be sure
he has a sense of humor
what others say who've
not been there
could be just a rumor


I wrote that in high school
 Quoting: the redeemable furry pete


Not bad. Done anything since H.S.?
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 70790916


oh yeah, published writer, working on a new book too now as well

just prefer no one knows me here, too many people hate me
Jesus loves me, this I know, for the bible tells me so

Calm seas do not a sailor make,
Nor easy horses, a horseman.

Nor easy believing, a Christian

Proudly deplorable since forever
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Don't laugh at Death
for you can't be sure
he has a sense of humor
what others say who've
not been there
could be just a rumor


I wrote that in high school
 Quoting: the redeemable furry pete


Not bad. Done anything since H.S.?
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 70790916


oh yeah, published writer, working on a new book too now as well

just prefer no one knows me here, too many people hate me
 Quoting: the redeemable furry pete


Many of the best in all fields throughout history have been hated.

Peace and good luck!
the redeemable furry pete

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Don't laugh at Death
for you can't be sure
he has a sense of humor
what others say who've
not been there
could be just a rumor


I wrote that in high school
 Quoting: the redeemable furry pete


Not bad. Done anything since H.S.?
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 70790916


oh yeah, published writer, working on a new book too now as well

just prefer no one knows me here, too many people hate me
 Quoting: the redeemable furry pete


Many of the best in all fields throughout history have been hated.

Peace and good luck!
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 70790916


Thank you, I'm hated for being a Christian mostly, so it's all good

Last Edited by Furrry Pete on 12/02/2016 03:36 PM
Jesus loves me, this I know, for the bible tells me so

Calm seas do not a sailor make,
Nor easy horses, a horseman.

Nor easy believing, a Christian

Proudly deplorable since forever
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Roses are red
Violets are blue
Some poems rhyme
But this one doesn't
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In visions of acid we saw through delusion and
Brainbox pollution,
We knew we were right.
The streets were our oyster, we smoked urban
Poison and we turned all this noise on,
We knew how to fight.
We dropped out and tuned in, spoke secret
Jargon and we would not bargain for what
We had found in the days of the underground.
We believed in Guevera, we saw that head held up
And our anger welled up,
But we kept it cool.
No need for machine guns 'cause the system was
Crumbling, our leaders were fumbling,
While we broke every rule.
We saw them on T.V. they'd blown their cover and we
Tried to smother their voices
With sound, in the days of the underground.
Whatever happened to those chromium heroes, are
There none of them still left around, since
The days of the underground
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 928


I'm of a quite different world view (though I realize the need for change as much as this poetry does) but I still recognize good poetry! Well done.

Several things strike me..."Brainbox pollution," "chromium heroes" especially...
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Not bad. Done anything since H.S.?
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 70790916


oh yeah, published writer, working on a new book too now as well

just prefer no one knows me here, too many people hate me
 Quoting: the redeemable furry pete


Many of the best in all fields throughout history have been hated.

Peace and good luck!
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 70790916


Thank you, I'm hated for being a Christian mostly, so it's all good
 Quoting: the redeemable furry pete


Matt. 10:22, bro!
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I'm not a Che fan either, but that's good stuff.
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In visions of acid we saw through delusion and
Brainbox pollution,
We knew we were right.
The streets were our oyster, we smoked urban
Poison and we turned all this noise on,
We knew how to fight.
We dropped out and tuned in, spoke secret
Jargon and we would not bargain for what
We had found in the days of the underground.
We believed in Guevera, we saw that head held up
And our anger welled up,
But we kept it cool.
No need for machine guns 'cause the system was
Crumbling, our leaders were fumbling,
While we broke every rule.
We saw them on T.V. they'd blown their cover and we
Tried to smother their voices
With sound, in the days of the underground.
Whatever happened to those chromium heroes, are
There none of them still left around, since
The days of the underground
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 928


I'm of a quite different world view (though I realize the need for change as much as this poetry does) but I still recognize good poetry! Well done.

Several things strike me..."Brainbox pollution," "chromium heroes" especially...
 Quoting: Anonymous Coward 70790916


Wasn't mine...lyrics from a Hawkwind song. Robert Calvert was a unique genius

Here is the song:



and here is another about the Petro dollar:

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